Sunday Snippets 3/8

Another excerpt from Andrea & the Five Day Challenge. In this scene it's Spirit Week and they are dressed up as Superheros. Andrea has just arrived at her locker with her friend Amy. Sticking out of her locker are a few fresh daisies and a mysterious note.

"Well, looky there.” Amy lifted her glasses and peered down the hall before returning her specs back to her nose. “Is it me or does Luke look like a mild- mannered reporter type?”
I glared at her.
It was as though she’d read my mind.
”It’s you,” I snapped back. Seven thirty-eight in the morning was way too early for all my synapses to be able to process this information. I was being rude and didn’t even know why.
“He’s like your Romeo in cargo pants.”
“He’s not wearing cargo pants. And don’t compare him to Romeo. That story is way too depressing.”
“OK, then he’s Mr. Darcy come to sweep you away from your mundane existence.”
“Amy, seriously, it’s time to lay off the romantic fiction. Besides, didn’t you tell me that crushes were for immature adolescents?”
“Crushes maybe, but Luke might just be the one for you. You know, the One.” She did the quotes in the air thing to emphasize her statement.
“Are you missing your macaroons or something? I’m only sixteen.” I must have been missing mine because I hadn’t used that expression since sixth grade. I covered my face with my hands.
“Whatever, Andi. Here he comes. If you ask me, he’s trying to woo you. Don’t do anything I wouldn’t do.” She tapped my shoulder before she traipsed away.
I barely took notice of her absence because I had mere seconds before Luke Ryan arrived. He didn’t even give Stephanie a glimpse as he passed by her down the hall. His gaze remained focused on me. I swiveled my stance to face my locker and pulled out the daisies, forming a half-dozen bouquet in my hand. How did he know daises were my favorite? Had I mentioned it?
More importantly, was Amy right?

Could Luke really be trying to woo me like some totally romantic gesture straight out of medieval, courtly love? I must have accidentally inhaled window cleaner or something because that just wasn’t possible. His note had only been meant as a thank you. Yes, that was it. He’d even said just that.
Sneaking a peek out of the corner of my eye, I could see he was almost upon me. My evil, impossible heart did a somersault in my chest. Oh, my gosh! Did I remember to put on deodorant this morning, because I was really starting to sweat. As if suffering from some horrifying form of hysteria, I stuffed my books into my locker as fast as I could. I had to get out of this hallway before he caught up to me.
Too late.


Anonymous said...

This is so true to the teenage mind! Sweet reading!

EDS_Ellen said...

Totally agree. Great insight into teenage emotion and the confusion of the whole "new" guy/girl dynamic. I don't miss those days, but it's fun to read about.

Johnnie Alexander said...

Ditto. She's such a fun and cute character.

Cindy K. Green said...

Thanks for the comments today! It is a cute, sweet story.

Linda said...

Pretty nice dialog! I like all the romantic fiction reference, it makes it so much more real.

Cecilia Corona said...

Teenage emotions and thoughts are spot on. Great snippet.

PT said...

What a fun snippet! I love the annoying friend. LOL

Cindy K. Green said...

Thank you for the comments. I had such a fun time writing these girls. :)

Alana Terry said...

Romeo in cargo pants. That's great! Nice job.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Loved the snippet! Got a kick out of this line: "Are you missing your macaroons or something?"

JTsuruoka said...

Nice work. It's vivid & realistic.

diannehartsock said...

So sweet! You show her confusion and fluster so well. :)